Citing annotated loose clippings as artifacts

I inherited a few clippings that have their provenance partially identified by a penned annotation. I later determined the full provenance information and would like to reflect it in the citation. This situation is a bit more complex than usual, so it seemed worthwhile to as for feedback.

Would the following citation work?

“The Torbolton Public School Junior Choir”, loose clipping, n.d., showing [PERSON] (front row, centre); penned annotation reads, “29 April 1970 , Arnprior Guide”; privately held by [HOLDER], [HOLDER'S ADDRESS]. Inherited from [PERSON'S NAME] in 2018. Item was subsequently fully identified as, “Arnprior Guide Third Section: Area Competitors in Ottawa Music Festival: The Torbolton Public School Junior Choir", Arnprior (Ontario) Guide, 29 April 1970, p. 11 (full-page); available as full edition in PDF format, Arnprior & McNab/Braeside Archives (https://search.adarchives.org : accessed 26 October 2023).

I've tried to use an artifact format for the initial sentence. The first clause identifies the original clipping, the second clause captures the added annotation information and the third clause identifies the current holder of the clipping. This is followed by a sentence identifying from whom it was received. I then use a sentence, based upon a newspaper citation format, to state what I've determined to be the full reference information.
 

Submitted byEEon Sun, 10/29/2023 - 15:14

Yes, H-H, that is understandable and supplies the level of detail that you prefer to record.

Submitted byHistory-Hunteron Sun, 10/29/2023 - 17:18

Thank you for your feedback. After a number of years of trying, I think that I just may be seeing how to pull things together to meet my needs. Now to fight off the urge to overanalyze things. :>)

This case was special. While I was able to find the record online, I had made a commitment to the rest of my family to properly document and file any inherited records I received.